My Bahaghari Life

Good pacing, great world building, grammar its smooth but slight tweaks then it all will be polished. Punctuations and paragraph spacing were good but their are some parts that needed to fixed and adjust but it doesn't mean the story is bad. It was good, and I highly recommended it, 😊it has a potential to be contracted as it has a unique sense, and the author ideas was very refreshing in a sense that you could really relate to. Regarding the character not sure yet, as of now I only read few chapters, I still need to read further to see and understand the character deeply. Overall great work, to more ink!

This is a solid foundation for a gripping fantasy tale. With careful attention to character development, thematic exploration, and originality, your story has the potential to resonate with audiences, keep going.

The grammar can make it hard to follow but someone else might like it.

"Oh really…" he pulled her tight to him and kissed her tenderly. "Its pretty sweet now."

Now the brave hero, chosen by the gods, is inside the castle to fulfill his mission.

Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid

Priest a pure support class which is able to give great buffs and can heal, priest and its related classes are the only thing that can remove DOT damage in the battle, their buffs are not something to sneeze either, not to mention the great heal that can keep the party going endlessly. (Warning - if playing in a party very highly recommended with Guardian this class is unkillable, with a taunt of a guardian the opponent can't take out the priest before taking out guardian)

I look around the place and saw Rose who stood back on her shoulder